Sunday, September 14

[p1] progress & cover ideas

Mocked up the entire book so I could see it in print and get a good critique for all the content. I'm just showing how the two of the poems look here. My book is pretty thick & you'll notice that my craft is not where it should be, so it's kinda just practice as well. 

Cover Sketches:

Matisse was one the artists that Gertrude Stein was inspired by. Sentence diagramming is often taught to beginners as "tree" diagramming because the shape the diagrams make sometimes can look like tree branches, roots etc. So this is an idea I'm thinking about to represent both the loose stream of consciousness of Stein's language (the style of painting) and the structure of diagramming (tree).

Another artists that she was inspired by was Picasso. This is the same idea as above but layering a portrait of Gertrude Stein by Picasso with the tree painting by Matisse. 

I began to think about how I could have the title on the cover without using type. So I wanted to see how "objects" would translate into hieroglyphics. It's interesting to me because it's obscure like her poems but visually it is made up of actual objects. So kinda the idea that it makes sense but doesn't make sense, like her poetry.  

Another idea of using the title without type. I recorded myself saying "objects" and then translated it into wave forms. It gives structure to a form of language without a visual structure, much like the concept of my book. 

Responses to my Folly Posters

Taylor: Starting off, the first thing I noticed was the images behind the teardrop letters. The violins, accordions, and pianos are backwards and flipped to make an almost abstract image. Without ever listening to the group, I can get an idea of what instruments are involved, and what I can expect from the concert. The teardrop letters are a nice touch, but hard to read as the words ‘Christian’ and ‘Howe’ are broken up into three a row. It doesn’t flow easily and instead draws my eyes towards the images behind them. Though, I love the colors of this poster. The font of ‘and Southern Exposure’ is nice, and while the color goes with the palette, I don’t think it quite fits with the teardrop letters above. The font of the date and time also could be changed; it seems a bit too stiff to fit with the rest of the poster. The whole piece seems to be detached from each other.

Taylor: The first thing I noticed about this poster was the drawn images of hands playing violins, accordions, and pianos. The upside guitars are a nice touch. Put all together, the images form a Rorschach image. The colors and images on this poster go well with the first poster. ‘Christian Howe’ and ‘Southern Exposure’ expand diagonally from a center point, and are almost symmetrical. The ‘S’ in Southern extends from the red triangle, while ‘E’ in Howe extends from the peach circle. Because they don’t extend from the same point, this seems to cause tension in this piece, and I can’t help but be drawn back to it each time. I like the font though; it goes great with the whole piece. The date and time look great here, I really love how the opacity is low.

Mr. D: I really like all three designs. I think my favorite is the second one with the seemingly black silhouetted figures. Your use of symmetry in this design is clever and appropriate! I like how the black images interact with the symmetrical  balance of the entire layout and give a human presence to the design.  The shapes convey the mood of musicians are actually interacting with the visible art elements to create sound.
I would suggest that you add a reverse dropout to the keyboard by making the board black and leaving the buttons white or vice versa. Remember what I said to put on my epitaph “He loved Contrast” (Smile).
As for the other designs they all have strong qualities I just think the free hand work that you did with the hands playing the keyboard needs to show  greater contrasting values.

Taylor:  My favorite out of the three, it combines all of the colors of the first two posters. I love the font, and how it is paired again with teardrop-like letters. The hand playing the accordion splits this poster in two halves, and both sections are used greatly. The date and time’s font isn’t exactly my favorite. It can be changed, but doesn’t take away from the piece as a whole. My only complaint on this poster is the ‘H’ in ‘Christian’. It is within a colored image, and it has been left white and skinny. Its almost hard to notice; maybe if it was just a smidge thicker it would be better. The same goes with ‘Southe’ in ‘Southern Exposure’. Other than that, I think this piece is great overall.

***Taylor is 20 years old latino and has lived in Kansas City most of her life. She's an artist and lover of music, but has never taken a design class. She does listen to live jazz in the city which made me think to ask her.  I'm still waiting to hear back from the other people I sent my designs to which are (1) my high school art teacher. He's a middle aged african american man. He always played jazz during class so I thought it would be kinda fun to get a critique from him on my college work. (2) My friend Amy from Arkansas, she's 21 and has only visited Kansas City, she doesn't listen to jazz, or study art. She's very southern (white). I tried to get different feedback from different nationalities/ backgrounds. I'll update this post as more responses come in.